Score: 10

"You thought I wouldn't find out..."

submission: TooF Collection 1

date: December 3, 2008

You thought I wouldn't find out that you made another one....but I did.....and yeah......HAHAHHAHAHAAAH....hmm....Ho w did the surgery go by the way? :)

Score: 5

"The good, the bad, and the truth"

submission: 12 FU's Of Online Gaming

date: July 6, 2008

Lets start with the good. You can tell you put a good bit of thought and work into this, and you have done a good job of putting it together. You did throw in a few graphics and other items outside of the pure video content. But thats where you stopped.

NG does have non-animation submissions, but usually they do have some kind of use of Flash enhancements, other content etc. Even if you took clips of online matches (even staged ones) showing examples of what you were talking about with maybe some text thrown in there, it would have been a great improvement. The work has to be visually stimulating also, and getting creative flipping off the camera while moving your arms around doesn't really cut it. Thats the bad.

The truth is, you have a good concept here and some funny/true material that people can relate to. But your presentation is poor at best. Be creative and add more to it than just you in your room talking. In this case your easiest and best bet is to show examples of each "Fuck You" while your talking. It gives the viewer something interesting to watch while enjoying your audio commentary. It could be as simple as MORE added text and images, or recordings of you and your friends playing games demonstrating what your talking about.

And this may sound like a small thing, but do some work to it next time before porting it over to Newgrounds. Leaving a youtube logo up in the corner may not seem like much, but it shows your lack of polish and time taken to make the video presentable for a different audience. The little things do make a difference. I would maybe go as far to even say if you didn't film the entire thing in your room, and did it in segments in different areas it would of at least added some variety to your video.

I encourage you to go back, remake this with the same script/ideas and put some more time into the visuals and polish. Till then 2 of 5, and 5 of 10. Good luck.

Score: 8

"A High Quality Flash"

submission: The Other Guys Brake Pads

date: April 11, 2008

Good job on the quality of the animation and conveying the humor of the audio quite nicely. It got a smile small chuckle out of me. But like said many times earlier, not as funny as the original. I guess you can't always live up to the standards of the first, hence why Chris was such a great comedian. Two model cars and a lighter is all he needed to get so many people to almost die laughing. But again, good take on this and glad to see someone appreciating the "old" 90's comedy.